Thursday, September 17, 2009

Twitter tales 2



Don't worry about me. I'm quite happy here. No, really.


Here's my second Twitter Tale.

Jad drank peppermint tea, laughing. The next day, he left a paper heart behind. The heart now hangs framed in silver above a Victorian bed.
Posted by Jerry at 2:29 AM
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1 comment:

  1. everetttrueSeptember 17, 2009 at 10:16 PM

    (From Twitter)

    @everetttrue
    Nobody's reading these. Don't blame you. They're crap. Twitter tales (2). http://bit.ly/3NZEUM

    @angusbatey
    "Crap" is overly harsh. I preferred the first one. Stronger plot, more logical structure. Second one was v Anita Brookner.

    @everetttrue
    ouch! the first was better. more natural. maybe everyone's only got one good Twitter tale in them, and mine's gone.

    @angusbatey
    No, I expect it's a form you can continue to refine. Like a haiku. You'll view 140 less as restrictive than enhancing elegance.

    @angusbatey
    You seem to have succumbed to temptation to abstraction in No 2. Didn't work for me, maybe preferable to others.

    @angusbatey
    I expect there are multitudes of ways you could take this. I look forward to more! (But have to get back to Dan Brown now.)

    @everetttrue
    it's the Internet. I'll rework it tomorrow. I veered to the abstract to hide the fact it was a true story

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